Dear Professor Blackstone,
I hope this message finds you well. My name is Jeremiah Lee and currently enrolled in Civil Engineering in SIT. I am excited to be part of your class and would like to take a moment to introduce myself.
I have always had a passion for creative design, physics and mathematics. This interest led me to choose engineering as my field of study, as it offers the perfect combination of theoretical learning and practical application. After studying engineering in polytechnic, the ability to design, innovate, and contribute to solutions that can have a tangible impact on society is what ultimately drew me to pursue this path in civil engineering.
I hope that through the critical thinking and communicating module, my ability to convey technical concepts to both specialized and non-specialized audiences effectively will improve. This will boost my skillset when I enter the workforce as I believe clear communication is imperative not only for collaboration within teams but also for presenting ideas, proposals, and research to a broader community. Similarly, I am confident that this module will help me to improve my writing skills. Through constant practice in class, this will refine my grammar skills which will be useful in research papers as well as resume writing in the future.
In terms of my strengths, I have always been a good listener and can articulate my ideas in a clear and structured manner. I tend to be patient when explaining concepts and enjoy engaging in discussions. I am also a confident speaker, I enjoy the process of public speaking and sharing knowledge with a community of like-minded people. However, I recognize that my weakness lies in my ability to stay on track with the topic at hand. I struggle with keeping focus and sticking to the points I have prepared for my presentation leading to an excessive sharing of points.
I believe what sets me apart from everyone else is my ability to make the best of a situation. Always bringing good energy to the people and places I visit. Especially in university where the environment is generally gloomy and filled with studies, I enjoy bringing joy and laughs to those around me.
I am looking forward to enhancing my communication skills throughout this course and working with you and my peers to develop both my verbal and written communication abilities. I am excited about the learning opportunities ahead and look forward to contributing meaningfully to the class.
Thank you for your time, and I look forward to a productive trimester.
Sincerely,
Jeremiah Lee Jie Le
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Lyka
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Dear Jeremiah
ReplyDeleteYour email to Professor Blackstone is well-structured, professional, and demonstrates enthusiasm for the course. It effectively introduces you, outlines your goals, and reflects on your strengths and areas for improvement. The tone is polite, and your self-awareness adds depth. However, some sections could be more concise, and grouping ideas (e.g., strengths and weaknesses) would enhance clarity. While your positive energy is admirable, framing it in an academic or teamwork context would better align with the email's purpose. Additionally, minor grammatical adjustments and avoiding repetition would improve readability. Overall, your email is engaging and leaves a positive impression with room for refinement
Regards
Elizabeth
Dear Elizabeth
DeleteI understand it now
Best regards,
Jeremiah
Dear Jeremiah,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your letter to Professor Blackstone. I find it engaging and it shows a clear picture of your background and why you choose to study civil engineering. One suggestion you might consider improving in your letter is to elaborate on how you plan to stay focused during presentations.
Overall I feel that this letter is great and I look forward in hearing from you more in class!
Regards,
Kok How
Dear Kok How
DeleteThank you for taking the time to read through my blog, your remarks have greatly encouraged me and I too look forward to your participation in class.
Regards,
Jeremiah
Best regards,
Jeremiah
Dear Jeremiah,
ReplyDeleteI thoroughly enjoyed reading your letter to Professor Blackstone. It was engaging and provides a good understanding of your background and your decision to study civil engineering. Some grammatical mistakes here and there but overall a good read!
All in all, I believe this is a great letter, and I look forward to hearing more from you in class!
Regards,
Lennon
Dear Lennon
DeleteYour comments have proven useful, I will make the necessary changes.
Best regards,
Jeremiah
Dear Jeremiah,
ReplyDeleteI can completely understand why you chose civil engineering as your course. I, too, believe that civil engineering is one of the best industries to create a meaningful and tangible impact on our society. Your letter to Professor Blackstone was well-organized and addressed all the key points effectively. It was clear and concise, making it a pleasure to read. I truly admire how you maintain such optimism in the challenging environment of university. I look forward to seeing more of your growth and achievements this semester.
Regards,
Lyka
Dear Lyka
DeleteI am thrilled to hear that we have a similar understanding and mindset. All the best in your trimesters ahead.
Best regards,
Jeremiah
Thanks, Jeremiah, for the comprehensive, well focused and informative letter. You address all the points of the brief, and throughout the letter, your effusive tone shines through.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate learning about your background, your interests and the way you view your comm skills in terms of levels and needs. I can sense that the person we see in class is the same as the guy who has written this letter.
At the same time, I'd suggest that you have leadership potential because of your willingness to voice your opinions, your comfort in speaking to the crowd and ease at "bringing good energy to the people...."
My challenge to you is to leverage your natural talents and skills and take that next step: Become the leader you should be. This might require you to get a bit more in touch with the needs of any group you're part of, in this case, your classmates and/or your class teams -- and as a good listener you should be able to do this -- and direct the energy you have toward bringing them together for whatever the intended purpose is. That might be something as simple an in-class task with a partner or something more general as a well developed discussion on the next project topic.
What I mean by this "interpersonally" is I'd like to see you "manage" your energy to the benefit of others, lift the class in general and your various teams up with a concerted focus. This requires that you voice out your insights and not just your clear enthusiasm (and humour).
As for language use, this is generally a fluent post, but there are a few sentence structure issues. I've revised the first and last one for you:
1. I am also a confident speaker, I enjoy the process of public speaking and sharing knowledge with a community of like-minded people. > (comma splice/run on sentence)
I am also a confident speaker, AND I enjoy the process of public speaking and sharing knowledge with a community of like-minded people. OR
I am also a confident speaker, who enjoys the process of public speaking and sharing knowledge with a community of like-minded people.
2. Always bringing good energy to the people and places I visit. > (fragment) ?
3. Through constant practice in class, this will refine my grammar skills .... > The constant practice in class will refine my grammar skills ....
I look forward to working with you further this term.
Best wishes,
Brad
Dear Professor Blackstone,
DeleteThank you for the words of encouragement and the challenge for me. It brings me great joy to know that I have the qualities of a leader. Hope that I will be able to take up the role of a leader and make good use of my energy to the benefit of my classmates.
Will take into account for my language use as well.
Thank you for taking the time to read through and give your thoughts, looking forward to learning more from you.
Best regards,
Jeremiah